Me in the Eyes of Other People

As the most acquainted and closed friends,my three roommates doubtless have a very comprehensive evaluation about me.Each of their fair comments are described as follows:
First of all,the comments from Lady Liu.---the tallest girl in our room---she regards me as the "Study Queen",because I'm always competing to get the scholarship.(words from the author:there's no such fact...)What's more,I have a broad range of friends at school,most of whom are got known at different students' communities.From time to time, there will be some friends asking me out for some parties,and so forth.In addition,she considers that I'm crazy about idols,but there's a deadline.I often show passionate admiration to someone,and even do many things closed to them,but it's just a brief period of enthusiasm in that I will soon kick them out of my mind when there's something else attracting me more.Unfortunately, she thinks that I'm far from mature because it's easy for me to say something wrong to others.However, she knows my thoughts are pure if only I can master the order and skills of speaking.
Secondly,the comments from Lady Sun.---"a walking common-sense cyclopedia"---she holds that I'm the kind of girl who have a mild temper,and who is hardworking both in study and in chores. What the vivid name she comes out with about me is called "Economy Applicable girl".However,she also points out that I'm sometimes a "life idiot",lacking common sense.(I want to cry...T.T)
At last,the comments from Lady Zhu.---the youngest in our dorm but we usually can't recognize that---there's no doubt that she considers me as a kind ,approachable,and moderate person,yet occasionally lacking confidence.I tend to smile,and can maintain smiling when talking to others.Likewise,I just hate quarreling as well as seeing others quarreling.As long as people surrounding me begin to quarrel with each other ,it's certain that I will hide myself away to avoid the angry sounds.Nevertheless, the problems she also points out are that when she listens to me talking, it's just like listening to a child saying something away from the topic, and she just can't take a serious attitude to my speech,even if the topic I'm putting is indeed a serious one.On top of that,I'm inclined to fantasy every so often.Often at this period of time,I will conceive an awfully nice future right ahead of me,(Words from the author:my opinion just is that this can help increase my motivation to move forward.)whereas occasionally I may detract from my ability and potential to a very low level. Then I will be in a gloomy spirit for a whole day , and don't want to talk to anybody.
I know comments from other people just like a mirror that can reflect both your advantages and disadvantages. So, more often will I listen to other's comments about me, and then I will both perpetuate my advantages and revise my disadvantages for the following of my life.
【The author : 1048612 潘庆飞】

文章行文连贯，文中的连接词和过渡词合理，使得全文结构紧凑；能熟练使用长难句，文中的长短句搭配合理，此外文中句式变化多样，；文章的用词相当丰富，较多使用学术词汇。略有不足的是一些中式英语的用法，如say something wrong to others，the order and skills of speaking, the following of my life，另外想要营造好的幽默效果，还可以精炼下某些词和表达方式，如she regards me as the “Study Queen”，regards换成worships是不是效果会更好些？总体来说这是篇很不错的文章，继续加油！

Admin 写道:文章行文连贯，文中的连接词和过渡词合理，使得全文结构紧凑；能熟练使用长难句，文中的长短句搭配合理，此外文中句式变化多样，；文章的用词相当丰富，较多使用学术词汇。略有不足的是一些中式英语的用法，如say something wrong to others，the order and skills of speaking, the following of my life，另外想要营造好的幽默效果，还可以精炼下某些词和表达方式，如she regards me as the “Study Queen”，regards换成worships是不是效果会更好些？总体来说这是篇很不错的文章，继续加油！

Thanks for teacher's elaborate comments . I am to polish my writing skills!