Me in the Eyes of Other People 第一次作业

What do I look like in front of other people? The question has been being kept around my mind for a long time. I have to run to my friends, relatives, and my parents in order to find out the exact answer.
Speak of my parents, it seems to be like I always have been a good-behaving kid to them. During the period of my high school, I was the look of never-let-my-parents-down-kid. An obedient boy was the first impression I left to the friends of my mother. Presenting homework at time, being obedient to my betters, and giving the elders respect in public and private, all of these kept my parents being proud of me. That’s why my relatives thought highly of me. Yet, I barely was the disappointment to my parents, though, the look of obedience made me hard to breathe on this high pressure. I had been wondering what the campus life would be look like, and looking forward to it throughout my teenage years.
And now, it has been for two years since I moved to Nanjing and initiated my campus life. As a junior, having many friends has always made my every day. My friends think of me as a thoughtful peer, which means I start my friendship on the base of demonstrating enough respect to each other. Two years campus life taught me a lot. To be a tough man, I got rid of showing my weakness in front of other people, which is meant I take displaying emotion easily in public as a demonstration of a lack of independence and confidence.
There is no doubt that everyone needs a few intimates. Those who can share with me no matter what is sad or happy, and those who can make me talk to them from the bottom of my heart are the true sense of intimates. I am grateful that I have a buddy who I can talk everything to him. From him, I know my peers consider me as a warm-hearted friend and a friend who keeps their privacy confidential.
An optimistic, polite boy might be the first impression to you at our first meet. You will know me better as a thoughtful, confident guy when we get along for a time.

文章行文连贯，连接词和过渡词稍欠丰富，有长短句搭配，但学术词汇不够丰富，建议平时多积累。写作角度略显直接，但并没有给出一个明确的观点，支撑段落的顺序和主题句并没有相对应。一些表达上也有错误，如The question has been being kept around my mind for a long time. (可以试试linger或者haunt)，I have to run to my friends ... (turn to sb. for sth)， it seems to be like (错误用法)，a good-behaving kid (well-behaved)，Presenting homework at time (比较明显的病句)，后面口语化的句子比较多了。希望以后可以在学术词汇和长句的使用上多下功夫。