1248614 高芯 第四次作业

This summer I went to my hometown, a peaceful and pastoral village in countryside to enjoy my vacation. The friendly people, the clean atmosphere, the closeness to nature and the green peace of life has really impressed me a lot. With the first cockcrow, one day began. Birds were twittering at dawn and the sight of the rising sun was glinting on the trees and pastures. At night, neighbors would talk to each other and share a ripe, big watermelon together under the bright-shined stars scattered all over the sky.
When I went back to Nanjing, I recognized that something has been different in my life. People were indifferently walking on the street as fast as if they were in a jogging competition. The heavy fog and haze in the air made me sneezed frequently. When I looked into the distance from the downtown area, nothing but grey had filled with my eyes. Instead of cockcrow and bird’s sing, my ear can only meet with noisy whistles and loud speaking. Everything especially the dark, blank sky at night made me miss the peaceful and pastoral countryside.

has really impressed me a lot.主谓一致。还有这句话本身主语部分很长，可以用被动语态，避免头重脚轻。the bright-shined stars就是bright stars吧，没有必要再加shined了，虽然我们可以说The stars were shining bright. The heavy fog and haze in the air made me sneezed frequently. 也可以试试smother，choke，suffocate等词，可能感情色彩会浓些。my ear can only meet 可以试试are stuffed with