第四次作业 1248509

I had once been addicted to the kind of soap opera which a modern girl goes back to ancient China by a car accident several years ago. Generally, a surprising and romantic experience was waiting for the girl. I dreamed what a lucky girl I am if I had the opportunity. But now, I hold the opposite view.
The peaceful, comfortable and enjoyable life of ancient China is only our imagination. We can compare the two different life pattern to illustrate it. Firstly, modern life gives us the most convenient way to travel. We can enjoy the scenery of every corner of the world. But in ancient, carriage is the only transportation and even takes several months to destination which sets obstacles on our way to go sightseeing. Secondly, we can wear all styles of clothes as fashionable as possible today. However, in ancient, the design and color of dressing are limited. The color of most clothing are dark and only a few designs are available. Meanwhile, quality and comfort level also lag a long distance to our modern dressing. Thirdly, the very mentions of entertainments in ancient are writing poetry, drawing and playing guqin. Conversely, in modernization world, we have a variety of amusements to choose from, ranging from computer games to rock and roll.
As mentioned above, going back to ancient times by accident is really a disaster. The life in ancient is not as funny as we imagine. It is better to cherish our modern life.

several years ago这个时间状语的位置有些问题，会使读者产生误解。was waiting for 倒不如用await，But now, I hold the opposite view.这句话有些奇怪，到底是什么相反的观点，如果根据前面的话，应该是我不想有这样的机会。We can compare the two different life pattern to illustrate it. 前面基本没提现代社会，一下子就比较显得比较突兀。modern life gives us the most，把give换成offer，provide或者leave，present都比give强吧，carriage is the only transportation这个不见得吧，古代也有其它的交通工具，比如船……The color of most clothing are dark and only a few designs are available这个也不见得吧，古代的纺织刺绣，颜色也很多，很多服饰设计也很多样，the very mentions of entertainments in ancient are writing poetry, drawing and playing guqin，也有蹴鞠，皮影，戏剧，游山玩水什么的吧，所以这部分都有点站不住脚啊。