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帖子  free晓晓66 周日 十月 19, 2014 5:47 pm

Urban Life and Rural Life
    Nowadays,more and more urban people want to live in the country while more and more rural people want to live in the city. Therefore people often find themselves caught in a dilemma where they should live in, urban or rural? It is really hard to say which is batter.
   Living in the urban area has many advantages. First,there is good education,for most senior schools and colleges are located here. Then,good service is also one of the advantages. Urban areas are developed. People can buy various kinds of foods and goods, both foreign and domestic. And there are a lot of places for entertainment,like the cinema,the concert and the theater. And there are also good medical treatment in urban. However, with the development of economy,there are more and more cars on road,which can not only cause traffic jam but also cause air pollution. What’s more, the pace of the city becomes more and more quick,and everybody is so busy with their work that they just have little time to relax.
    Living in the rural area,however,is different from living in urban. People always have a leisurely and comfortable life. They can enjoy the green fields,fresh air,and beautiful scenery. If they are tired,they can lie under the tree,watching the sunrise and sunset,enjoying the bird singing. Every one gets along with their neighbors. If one needs help,every one will help him. But rural life also can not be perfect. There are few cultural and entertainment activities. And the transportation here is not as convenient as the urban. In addition,there is no supermarket,no cafe,and so on. Therefore,people always have to go to urban area to shopping.
    All in all,both urban life and rural life have their own advantages and shortcomings. Different people will make different choice.

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帖子  Admin 周日 十月 19, 2014 6:06 pm

Nowadays,more and more urban people want to live in the country while more and more rural people want to live in the city. 这个有点太普通了,换一些高级一点的词汇,First,there is good education,既然是比较,当然是better了,Then,good service is also one of the advantages. Urban areas are developed. 基本上就是汉语思维吧,两个句子很难衔接上,另外good service指什么?我们去饭店吃饭,服务员很客气周到,我们可以说you got good service,你这里想指什么呢?And there are a lot of places for entertainment,like the cinema,the concert and the theater. And there are also good medical treatment in urban.都以And为连接词,可以用What's more, In addition这样的表达啊。乡村那段基本都是简单句,请平时多读一些报刊杂志上的文章,提高自己的书面表达能力。

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