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An Urban Life or A Rural Life

Nowadays, although the urbanization of our country has developed very well. Some people would like to reside in rural areas.

When you live in urban areas, the sense you may see mostly is countless houses, apartments, and skyscrapers. You can buy anything you want in the supermarkets and emporiums. But you may worry about that if the vegetables are sprayed too much pesticide or if the cardigan is made of real sheep’s wool. Of course you may have a lot of job opportunities in the city, but you also have much pressure on *** a living there. Because competitions always appear at where the opportunities are.

When you live in rural areas, you can breath the freshest air every morning. And you can enjoy the placid life without the vehicle whistle or another noise, but with the birds singing and the trees rustling. You can plant your vegetables and rear the livestock as your like. Therefore, you can harvest your own safety green food and true wool. But you have to face the problem that your residence is faraway from your work place. You may take hours to commute to the city everyday. But if you think the good environment of your residence deserve that, there is no problem.

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