1248511 代丽 第四次作业

My two kinds of classmates
Among all of my friends, the two kinds have left me a deep impression in my high school. They have extremely different characteristics. One is more dependent, while,the other is independent.
It seems that the girl,who was used to relaying on her parents and her relatives, in our memories, remained not adapt to the condition after she went to school some three weeks. Fearing loneliness, she usually walked together with her roommates. But to our surprised, she ate nothing unless we roommates bring her the food on her hand. In addition,the clothes never be touched by herself but by her mother on the weekend. Compared with the contemporaries, she lost the basic abilities to live. to some degree, had not the assistance of classmates, she could not finish her study.
While, on the other hand, the other girl acted very independently. Be friendly with others, she was famous in class. Everything was done orderly under her arrangements. Sometimes, her spare time would be filled with some part time jobs earning some money to release the financial crisis of her family. If someone is in need of help, she is always the first to make her efforts to help him. What’s more, she was also a pushy girl. So there were rarely chance for us to show her our kindness.

the two kinds have left me a deep impression in my high school.这个主语有问题哦，They have extremely different characteristics. 应该是characters。One is more dependent，为什么是more呢？relaying on her parents and her relatives，注意单词拼写rely。 to our surprised，注意词性suprise，或者what astonished us was that ... 能看出来应该是讲洗衣服，In addition,the clothes never be touched by herself but by her mother on the weekend，但这个表达我们会用do laundry，下面这句话也是个有语病的句子，而且是汉语翻译过来的，请考虑下如何用写作的语言表达，to some degree, had not the assistance of classmates, she could not finish her study. 思路不错，但用词和语法方面还有待加强啊。