Me in the eyes of others

There is a girl in my mirror.I have known her for a long time.She is a simple ordinary girl.Every morning she smiles to me and tells me that a new day is begin.She chose to be happy.Then I will tell the story about her.
In the eyes of parents,she is a sensible and obedient daughter.Her mum told her that everything people do will come back to them since she was a child.Therefore,she try to be good to everything. She try hard to make her parents feel proud of their daughter. However,she always say nothing but good news to her parents .Even when she is in a bad mood,she will never communicate with them.
In the eyes of friends, she has a totally different character .She likes playing jokes.She will stay up half the night talking with friends in high school reunion.She is also always ready to help.When with friends,she was cheerful and humourious.where there is her,there is laugh.However ,if she has trouble with others ,it will take along time to get herself out the sorrow.
In the eyes of teacher,she is such a quiet girl.She hardly talks in class.When teachers ask questions,she never put her hand up to answer the question voluntarily.Sometimes she will skip classes,but teachers hardly notice that.However ,she can always hand in the homeworks in time .Therefore,her grades is always in the average level.
In the eyes of me,she seems cold and unfriendly in appearance but she has a warm and passionate heart .When she was with someone she is familiar with,she was so open minded. She also has a stable personality and high sense of responsibility .But sometimes she is very stubborn and a little hypocrisy.The most serious weakness of her is laziness.She often put things off until the last minute. She is so oversensitive that even some casual words or unexpected actions of others will hurt me.When she is feeling bad ,her hobbies will play a important role to make her relax.She will keep singing or dancing for hours until she forget those these disagreeable things.
The girl in my mirror is me.

文章内容基本连贯，但行文稍欠流畅；能使用一些结构简单的长句，但是不能够熟练运用，文中连接词和过渡词稍欠丰富，希望继续努力。文中大多数都是比较简单的句子，缺少长短句使用的变化，以后写作的时候需要留意下，一些表达方式和语法错误在文中也存在，如a simple ordinary girl (比较中式的表达，两个形容词中间应该加and），a new day is begin (基本语法)，she chose to be happy (时态不一致，另外这句话的意思从上下文来看也不是很明确)，she try hard, she always say (基本语法，主谓一致)，Even when she is in a bad mood, she will never communicate with them. (时态错误)，where there is her, there is laugh. (Wherever she goes, there is laughter.或者Where there is laughter, there is ..., 类似的意思还有lights up life, bringing laughter and happiness wherever she goes.) 最后，作文里时态和主谓不一致的地方比较多，建议平时多留心一下语法，保证句子的准确性。