Me in the Eyes of Other People 1048519 王龙

Me in the Eyes of Other People
“Regardless of what you are like in real life, the key seems to be to act yourself.” Once some people asked me what kind of the other person, I always told them this sentence. Who am I? What kind of me in the eyes of other people? This question is very easy to answer for me. Because there is no one understand better than I know myself. However, this is not representative of the views of others. So I have to ask other people.
Above all, I think my parents are the most power to answer this question. When I was a child, my parents taught me to smile and to be polite. They taught me not to talk to loud or laugh too hard. They taught me to brush my hair before I went next door to play, because that’s what “others” thought was appropriate. They also taught me to listen more than I talk, which I always had doing. What am I in the eyes of my parents? Until now, I think I have trying to do a polite gentleman.
Besides, I want to answer this question through several instances. More than ten years ago, when I was still in primary school, my head teacher helped me form a good learning habit. That is to study diligently and carefully. I would like to thank her because she let me get a successful start. Six years ago, when I was busy preparing for the Senior middle school Entrance examination, an unknown middle-aged lady helped me out when I had a heavy heatstroke on my way home. I own my success in that exam to her. Two years ago, informed after being admitted to China pharmaceutical university , I come alone to Nanjing to work for tuition. Then I am lucky enough to encounter a kind old woman who support my tution without any requirements. I can not express my gratitude but to memorize her in my mind. I have to be grateful to others and seek ways to return them kindness, which is decided by my these experiences.
Now,I am a Sophomore. As a class monitor, I do not think my behavior is good enough, but I will try my best to do better. Because I am very treasure that we can come together.

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