1048217 李婷 第一次作文

Me in the Eyes of Other People
It’s quite challenge to start such a topic, which related to people’s views on myself , good or bad, for that, I often can’t see the bag filled with my shortcomings hung on my back.
However, in order to get my credits, I would better put the task to finish this composition on a right place.
Apparently, the scrap is far from an autobiography, still, I’d like the article be an essay rather than a stiff record of interviews on the recorder.
Thus I begin to try my best to call on my memory about all the comments on me derived from others. Unfortunately, I find I my self have been made up by contradictions in my growthhood. “Shyness, brave, obedience and naughty”, these words echoing in my brain. To struggle out, I decide to eliminate those those “had beens” out, for example, “she bad been so quiet while in primary school.” So that I will grasp a much clearer clue to explore myself. That is, I will discuss what I am like in my present youth, not in my early adolescence or childhood.
I am mostly impressed by others’ interruption by “lower your voice” while I was talking, especially about some attractive ,even if to me only, things. I always forget where I am, I am ,some kind of inclined to impose my feelings on others, at the same time, I am eager to others’ responses. I want to be more closer to my audiences. Generally speaking, such my over-enthusiasm give a good illustration to my unconsciously behavior of taking my accompaniers’ way and push him or her to the roadbed. Such me may give others the illusion that I am a girl eagers for power, wants to be a controller. Maybe, in some degree, by the way, I am the Leo.
Conforming with the Leo character, I come into some self-proud ,other-detested feathers, I still feel lucky to inherit the justice from the Leo, or more truly, from my elderships. In my opinion, there have had enough injustice in the world, naturally or man made, to be a human, above the animal kingdom, is obliged to preside over some wrong things as long as in one’s reach.
“You are so frankly, sometimes your words are really hurting.” Once my classmate said to me, I was deeply embarrassed at that moment and keep thinking till now. however, words always slip out of my tongue. I am putting the coat, “ be elegant but not let be elegant “. Pursuing for a way of euphemistic should be my pursuit.
“Me in the eyes of other people”, is about my communication with people. What I have written down is my major feather while accompanied. As for be alone, there should be another me, let me just put it aside.

作者词汇基本功很好，一些学术词汇的使用也比较灵活，比如derived from用的非常好 ；但是开始那几段太绕了，半天没说到点子上，一直到第四段最后才看到你要写什么)，一些具体的表达错误如下，interruption by “lower your voice ”(没看明白，suggestion? lowering your voice)，some kind of (口语化)，be more closer (much closer)，eagers for power (eager是形容词)，there have had enough (比较明显的语法错误)，You are so frankly (frankly是副词，straightforward?)，文中还有一些时态不一致或者错误的地方，以后请多加注意。