1248703 李依诺 第一次作业

Me in the eyes of others
   Nothing came into my mind when I saw the topic for the first time. It never occurred to me to be aware of the specific description someone has on me. “what kind of person am I ?” that’s a new question for me to figure out.
   I asked several friends for their opinions. Most of their response are “ what happen to you? It is not normal for you to ask like that.” I suppose that is my first answer. I am crude and careless in their eyes. And this feature is probably the reason why I always live in a mess. But on the other hand, it makes it easier to get along with me.
   Some of my previous classmates regard me as a quiet painter. A few of them even keep my painting with them which is greatly touching. Although I am not worthy of such a title, it’s delighted to be artistic in others’ mind. Painting is what I am interested in, and I am trying to be a competent “painter”.
   There’ s another point of my characteristic I found in my roommate’s composition. she described me as a warm-hearted girl. I can’t remember the event she mentioned, but I am sure I would give a hand to anyone who needs my help and I am proud of this kindness.
   These days I have collected so much information about me in the eyes of the others. it’s quite helpful to find out the real me. It’s also glad to know that my friends like the real me. that’s fairly enough for me to live a happy life.

思路比较清晰，能够去尝试使用一些复杂句，但整体来看还是简单句和偏口语化的句子多一些，还缺少一个比较明确的主题，具体的一些表达问题如下，如 I am crude and careless，这里的crude我不知道你是想作何解释，因为我们一般指人或者人的行文，crude并不是一个正面的词汇，它指offensive or rude, especially about ***，所以这里并不合适， 另外Some of my previous classmates regard me as a quiet painter. 后面并没有提到quiet，所以前面的quiet是多余的，Painting is what I am interested in, and I am trying to be a competent “painter”.这是一种比较泛的描述，能不能再具体一些呢？

妹纸，咋首行缩进你造不。。能教下我吗？

手动。。。