1248710 高茹 第一次作业

Me in the Eyes of Other People
    Everyone must care about what is he/she like in the eyes of other people and I believe most of us have asked others many a time about this question. Certainly, I am no exception as well.
    The first adjective was took out from other people is serious. That word puzzled me quite a long time. I cannot understand why I was so serious in their eyes and I peculiarly wanted to know what they thought as well. After that, a boy said,”oh, it is just the first impression. And in fact you are a smart and funny girl!” I suddenly felt a sense of relief.
    Now let us get down to business. Honestly I have to admit that I am a really interesting girl. Everyone will burst into laughter on many occasions if I am here. It is my honor that most people prefer to stay with me and like to invite me to play with them. Someone said that I am a warm girl. They are able to speak their mind in front of me without any embarrassment. Here thank for their belief.    
    There is a dramatic phenomenon that occasionally someone has known about me in a wrong way. One thing remains fresh in my memory. Before being a high school student, everyone in school including my parents all thought that I was a diligent student. I can still remember that one day I walked to school and recited words simultaneously and then a teacher of other class was passing by. Things went normally as before until after school my friend in other class told me that her teacher praised me in their class and regarded me as a good example for all students because of “my crazy love of study”. I did not know whether I should laugh or cry. I just wanted to say to the teacher that I was just too lazy to recite those words last night. It is really a beautiful misunderstanding of me.
   I am always curious about what others think about me and sometimes afraid what should l do if I am not good in their eyes. Nonetheless I get a new cognition that I can always gain a lot whatever others think about me.

最后一段用了curious，虽然简单，但是是个很不错的表达，也可以尝试用在第一句话里，或者我们可以用value their image来代替care about。第二段是我觉得比较失败的一笔，因为即使是第一印象还是有原因的，为什么会这样没有加以进一步解释。Someone said that I am a warm girl. They are able to speak their mind in front of me without any embarrassment. 这两句话我没弄明白是怎么回事，求解释。There is a dramatic phenomenon that occasionally someone has known about me in a wrong way. 这句话不适合做第三段的主题句，请考虑换一种表达。

第二段之所以没说为什么serious,我是觉得不必面面俱到，因为我后面说了别人说是第一眼是那样，我觉得像是一个类似于引子一样的一小段。当然了，可能加一句比如说because I always keep a poker face.这样的话不会惹人非议。Someone said that I am a warm girl. They are able to speak their mind in front of me without any embarrassment.这一句我想表达的是别人会跟我诉说一些平常说不出口的话，但我确实也不太会表达这句，写来写去都觉得很别扭。最后一段第一句也是想了好久，就是想说别人有时候认为的恰恰相反，也许我就用个正常的表达会好点，还得加强啊。写作文总是觉得书到用时方很少，只能继续努力了。谢谢老师中肯的点评，看了真的很有收获。