1248709崔杉杉第一次作文

  What kind of person I am? This question has not an exact answer because in different people’s eyes , there is a different me. In my eyes,I think I am easygoing,active and optimistic, and sometimes would be a lot lazy. But what other people think about me ?
  In the eyes of my teachers, I would be a quiet student for whether in primary school or in high school or in college, I am always being quiet in class,just listening not speaking. Therefore,there are few chances for my teachers to see my active side.
  However, in my friends’ eyes, there is a completely different me--active, cheerful, a lot crazy and a lot lazy. I often sing to them,but I do not sing the right songs.I will change the lyrics and use my own words, which always makes them laugh. Sometimes this behavior would be a lot stupid, but they know I just want to let them happy and relaxed. When it comes to lazy, I think my two roommates would have many to say. If you come to our dorm, you can see that whenever it is, in the morning,at noon or at night ,I am always sleeping. Unlike my roommates,I spend most my spare time with my bed.
  But in the eyes of my family members, there is another me. There are three daughters in my family. I am the youngest but tallest one. So if there is some work needing amount of energy, I must be the first choice. And I am also the person makes them at ease because I hardly do something that makes them worry me. Thus no matter what I want to do, they always invariably support me.
  All in all,no matter what person I am in other people’s eyes,they are all true me. I really live. I love such me.

我们课上讲了不要过多的使用人称代词，看来这个问题不是那么容易改掉的。文中的语言比较偏向口语，简单句使用的也比较多，多数句子都有或多或少的语法问题，实在有点无从改起，建议参看一下班里其他同学或者学长学姐写过的，自己平时也应追求语言的准确性，请务必多要求下自己。

a lot 都改为 a little ,用错词了 。
把This question has not an exact answer改为There is no exact answer to this question
I am also the person ... worry me改为I am a person who can let them rest assured, because I rarely do things that let them worry
they are all true me 改为 they all are real me
把 I love such me 改了，I love what I am now.
以后一定会好好积累词汇，不能把作文写的太口语化。