1248715 郭玮 第一次作业

     “You are tender, virtuous, beautiful, optimistic, accommodating, generous, etc.” your friends answered, when they were asked what kind of person you are in their eyes. Different questioners get similar answers; however, it is undeniable that there impossibly are two so similar men. This is a difficult question.
     When I tossed this hot potato to my acquaintances, I received a lot of compliments. “You are mild,” one of them replied, because I have never been angry in his memory. “You are very generous,” one of them replied, on account of sharing my “bliss” with her. “You are optimistic,” one of them replied, due to my creed of “Where there is life, there is hope.” “You are independent,” one of them replied, owing to my cooking skills and self-care abilities. I am warm-hearted. I am fashionable. I am easygoing. Acquaintances eulogize me too much, so that I myself firmly believe that I am really excellent and perfect. Actually, it is an illusion.
     “Comparing you to one song is appropriate,” one of my intimates said, when I asked him what kind of person I am. I immersed myself in fantasies of grace, soft and joy. But soon a bolt from the blue shocked me, the song is “A Song to Tough Guys”. I am a “tough guy”! These words have been echoing in my mind. “I am an iron lady. I am handsome.” I comforted myself, but comments on me derived from my parents dealt me a blow. Stubborn, bad-tempered, lazy and naughty, they comment me like this. These might be a part of true me, which only be shown to intimates and family, even sometimes hurt them.
     God is fair. I am destined to have both merit and demerit. Although my defects might just be seen by the person closest to me, I will endeavor to correct them. I think I will be a better man.

行为比较流畅，语法搭配也掌握的不错，但总感觉第一段是这几段里最不好的一段，并没有很好的起到一个引领全篇的作用，另外This is a difficult question.有些多余了，能不能把第一段重新写一下？Comparing you to one song is appropriate这个有点偏中文表达习惯，a perfect match可能会好些。总体上来说还是非常好的，特别是第二段里几个排比的使用和具体例子的结合，请继续努力。