1248513 杨欣 第一次作业

Me in the eyes of other people
What do other people consider me? This question has lingered in my mind for a long time. Consulting my friends, however, they give me various descriptions.
Yue is one of my best friends. In her eyes, I am a crazy girl in lady's clothing. With stupid smiles on the faces, we usually hang around in the campus, the topics we talk about ranging from Maths' problems to stars' gossips. The most crazy thing we had done is that we dropped a class and rushed to listen a vocal concert. The music was so pleasant that we didn't realized that time went on and that we didn't want to leave. We were as lunatics who screamed desperately in the end. Just as a saying goes, who keeps company with the wolf will learn to howl. As you guessed, under the influence of me, sometimes, Yue plays as crazily as me.
Another friend called Chang says that the first impression I made on him was a serious child, for I attended to class without a brilliant smile on my face. First impressions are often deceptive. What a kind girl I am!
Some people believe that I am a hard-working student because I can stay at the library in the whole day. While other people counter by saying that I may spend all my spare time on surfing on the Internet. Some people criticize that being particular is my principal defect, but other people contend that keen taste is one of my advantages.
It is hard to say that who is correct or who is wrong, yet both sides do not give a full picture. Actually I am a simple girl, who is a obedient pupil in teachers' eyes but will eat an apple on class, who is a dutiful daughter but sometimes is a headstrong child and who loves rock music as well as folk songs.
In the end, I want to say, it is important for us to learn a person from many different aspects.

能够使用一些比较好的搭配，但语病也不少啊，另外连贯上还有待改进。"Another friend called Chang says that the first impression I made on him was a serious child, for I attended to class without a brilliant smile on my face. First impressions are often deceptive. What a kind girl I am!"这句话是我最没看懂的一句话，能不能解释一下啊。跷课是skip class，“yet both sides do not give a full picture”，可以试试fragment这个词。

文章讲的在别人眼里的自己的特点涉及到了好几个不同的点并且能有具体的事例来支撑，内容饱满。但是总觉得有一点小问题，有些词组的搭配感觉有点奇怪比如应该是on campus而不是 in the campus, 还有without a brilliant smile,如果想说一点笑容都没有的话，觉得brilliant这个词应该要换一下。还有就是句子不是很连贯，像是中文写的翻过来的，不太看得懂。