me in the eyes of other people 1248520 李明

Me in the eyes of other people
People always want to be aware that what other people think of them. But for me, it seems to be impossible to find out what kind of person we are in others’ eyes, on account of the fact that we are kind of complicated to be understood all of us.
Nevertheless I tried to ask my friends the question. And not to my surprise, they have different answers. One of my roommates said that I was kind of industrious in that I always went out to study. One of my senior and my best tutor told me that in his mind, I was expert in dealing with activities but anxious when things went wrong. One of my teachers thought highly of me, because in her eyes I was a good monitor and a good student. But she suggested me not to chatter sometimes. I am very grateful for her advice. Maybe in others’ eyes, I am totally different.
What I can learn is that what we regard ourselves as may be totally contrasting with what others think of us. We could not demand for the same impressions from each individual. What we can do is just be ourselves no matter what happen.

首尾呼应这一点不错，但是中间的例子阐述有些单薄，另外语法的问题还是比较多的，自己平时还是可以注意一下的，一些基本的搭配，主谓时态一致等等应该能够避免的。词的选择可以多考虑考虑，有些太过口语化，比如kind of。挑选几个有特点的说一下，want to be aware换成are curious about会不会好一些？but for连在一起是要不是……的意思，可以试试 and I am of no exception. However, ...这样连接可能会更连贯些。 “we are kind of complicated to be understood all of us”，可以采取too……to的结构或者so... that，“I was expert in dealing with activities but anxious when things went wrong”这句话我不是很理解，能不能想想怎样表达更清楚？