1243808-刘丹萍第一次作业-Me in other person's eyes

My first image to the others,I believe,is not my face but my voice.
According to my roommates,they had sounded my voice,”We’ve reached 6th floor,eventually,”before me appeared.How careless and casual a girl,they might think.As expected,I did.
In my mother’s eyes,I was only a little girl who couldn’t look after herself at all.Therefore she nearly harped on everything but the kitchen sink before attending university.Addicted to the happiness being a freshman,I only kept an eye out of her advise.Hence my beginning of college life was on the blink.I practically stayed in a state:losing and seeking.
Apart from these weakness,I nevertheless get some shining points—one of those, is perseverance.I have tried to tidy my life and made sure myself never at a loose end again.My friends recently have praised me for my hard work.I accepted it with “modest”,because I’m not in Kanas any more.At least it proved myself to my mum a adult as I am.
It’s not only a one-hit wonder,I swear.It’s believed I’ve worked on the yellow brick road;at the same time,the image in my friends’ eyes of me records my each pace.

前面写的很好，后面感觉有点跳跃了……用了一些不错的短语，比如harp on等，从这里开始Addicted to the happiness being a freshman,I only kept an eye out of her advise.Hence my beginning of college life was on the blink.I practically stayed in a state:losing and seeking.我就看不太懂了，keep an eye out of 好像没有这个表达吧，我只记得keep an eye out for表示提防，看看你的搭档怎么看，也请你自己也考虑一下，后面这部分的应如何安排，想表达怎样的主题。