1048213 祖思佳　第一次作业

Me in the eyes of other people
Act 1
It is a bright and quiet morning. The gentle breeze with the perfume of flowers blows away all the noises. Look!The girl, who is standing in the shade and watering flowers patiently, is my obedient daughter. She likes cries . She is mentally frail when contends with difficulty. She also likes smiles. She will be excited when achieves her goal . She is polite to talk with the others. She also respects the old and cherishes the young . In my eyes, she is a honest, conscientious and obedient kid .
Act 2
Look! The classroom is crowed. The girl, who is discussing positively with her classmates, is my friend. As far as I know, she is a persistant girl. She always insist on studying several hours during holidays to not dwadle away her time. She has a good life style. She perpetuates sports everyday to keep a healthy life. She not only likes to help the others when they contend with difficulty but also likes to accept our sincere advice with pleasure. In my eyes, she is a positive, reliable and friend.
Act 3
It is the first Sunday of this mouth. It is also the first weekend of the new semester. Some university students have already reached our hospital. Look!
The girl, who is telling stories to the disabled children, is one of the devoted volunteers. Sometimes, she actively assists the patients in doing exercise for rehabilitation. Sometimes, she does not shrink from tiol and hardship and brings the disabled to the park to enjoy the beautiful sunshine. She can sing or dance with the others in front of the disabled. It is her who brings vitality and happiness to our hospital. In our eyes, she is a kindhearted enthusiastic and responsible youth .

正确句子比例较高，但可以适当增加复杂句的使用，文章会更出色；能使用多样的词汇表达，也能使用一些学术词汇，请继续努力！但整体结构上略欠考虑，句子间关系也不是很密切，还注意一些表达上的问题，如the perfume of flowers (一般我们会用fragrance吧)，She likes cries. (She always cries???)，She also respects the old and cherishes the young. (尊老爱幼放在这和上下文没太大的联系)，a honest (冠词错误 an honest ... kid)，who is discussing positively (positively是想表达什么呢，actively, enthusiastically, with zest?)，disabled children (还是用handicapped好些吧)，