Me in the eyes of other people 车蕊

“Who am I?” I ask myself. I’m a happy girl who seems never sad. I am a bit of lazy and pudgy. Although I had shouted all day and night that I must lose weight, it would never come true. Somebody said: “you are never really known yourself, even thought you can accurately look through other people.” I totally agree it, because I don’t know who I am. So I ask others “What kind of person in your eyes”
In my teacher’s eyes, I am a diligent, hard-working student, but a bit of shy and smart. I seriously listen to every sentence which teacher had said and finish the task on time and will never be late. Actually, I am always feeling sleepy at the first class and sometime I’m absent-minded. I don’t think I am a good student. If I work-hard like other students, I would get higher marks.
In my friends’ eyes, I am as warm and cheerful as a northeast girl. They all know I love shopping, eating even I have full. “It would a luck day to stay with you.” They said, “Because it is hard to see you upset.” It is my honor to make my friends delight. In my view, my task is to make my friends happiness. Just like somebody said “happy is a day, upset is a day, why don’t you choose to happy all the day!”
In my parents’ eyes, I am just a little child who is petulant and mischievous. But I will never do anything that is bad, such as full in love in senior high school and so on. So I think I am qualified to be a daughter. Virtually, I am just wanted to experience the feel of loving by my parents after a long semester.
In my own opinion, everybody have two sides. One side is the way that he shows on the stranger, and another side is the way that he shows on acquaintance. For me, I am quiet and apathetic when I face to strangers or someone I don’t care. I’m s talker and listener when I spent time with my friends and family. I think only when we meet our the most love people, we will display the real self.
Every man has the defects of his own virtue. Just follow your own course, and let people talk.

内容基本连贯，但行文稍欠流畅；文章学术词汇不够丰富，建议平时多积累。文章开头略显混乱，倒不如把倒数第二段放在开头做主题段。文中连接词和过渡词稍欠丰富，以“I”为主语的句子过多，使得整篇文章显得十分平淡，导致语言无力，文章风格偏口语化。文中的语法错误还是比较多的，包括时态，动词和介词的搭配，主谓一致等，这里就不一一指明了，希望以后可以在语法和词汇方面加以努力。

谢谢老师的批改，辛苦了，我会在这方面继续努力的！！
老师，我记性不好，单词记不住怎么办啊，是不够努力么？