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帖子  陈淳 周一 十一月 05, 2012 4:35 pm

[left]from long time ago, our country's people got different social level, like people in big city, people in small city and
people in town. at the begining of our country's development, they spend more money in big city's development cause
they belive there must be some people become rich and then they can lead another go rich but thing is that there were some
people became rich but they do not want others be rich because this will make them make less money than before. so the
levels appeared.

people in big city, they always can get somehings good, like they can get good food, they can get good social environment
and they can get good education. our government spend more money in schools which are in big city, people in big city's
schools can get much better education than people in town, they got computers they got protect by security they got more
types of classes than people in town like healthy class and psychology. people in town they also can get education but not
as good as the education which big city's people get. like the terrible environment and less wages of teachers.
there are some schools only for people who got lots of money, they pay a lot to get a better education for their children
and other people who are not rich just go to normal school, the level of education is different.
we got lots of exams in our study life, the higher level you go to the much more exams you will have and especialy in high
school, we got neight years free education and it is not include the high school, some people who are poor just give up to
go to high school and there are also some people who graduate high school and ready to go to a good university, but because
they do not have enough money to pay for that, they have to give it up.
finally we can see that people who are rich and get a high social level always can get good education than people in town and
poor. to improve those things, i think our government need to make the education in a same level and spend more money in town
and better make the night yares free education longer and the most important thing is we all the citizen in China, there is no
one noble than others.

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帖子  Admin 周六 十二月 01, 2012 7:00 pm

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