1048517 张野 第一次作业

I was deeply shocked on hearing the topic of this composition, never before have I thought about what kind of person I am in the eyes of other people. There is no doubt that it is really a difficult question while we have no other choice but to answer. To finish this task, I asked my parents and some of my friends about their impressions on me, here is the result.

In my parents' eyes, I have always been their worthy son. In high school, I performed well in almost every examination. To their great satisfaction, I was admitted by a famous university and become one of those who walked out of our small village to pursue higher education. The first day I entered this university, I told myself that I must work twice as hard as other people to make me excellent. The second year in university, I bought my first computer with my scholarship. Just as my father said, I know what my responsibility is and never make any trouble for them.

However, in the eyes of my friends, I am kind of introvert. I am not good at breaking into their conversions. It is often the case that when my friends are talking cheerfully, I just stand beside them and have no idea how to join in their conversations. Some of my friends tell me that I am to some extent indifferent. I have made up my mind to learn to be more open-minded, this is why I joined the students' union to attend more activities and to meet more people. By now, I have come a long way in dealing with other people.

Hard-working and introvert, this is what kind of person I am in the eyes of other people.

文章行文连贯，连接词和过渡词稍欠丰富，内容基本连贯；能熟练使用长难句，文中的长短句搭配合理，文章用词不错，但是学术词汇不够丰富，请继续努力。表达上的一些问题有，worthy son (这个形容词用的有问题，不太确定你想表达什么情感，beloved或者precious?)，good at breaking into their conversions (略显中式表达方式，not good at socialising或者fear of participating in conversation)，Some of my friends tell me that I am to some extent indifferent. (indifferent应该不是你想表达的意思吧)，I have come a long way in dealing with other people (这句话我也没弄太懂你的意思)。希望以后写作时在词汇选择以及句与句关系上多加注意。