Me in The Eyes of Other People:彭倩 1048502 第一次作业

When it comes to the question "what kind of people I am in the eyes of other people? ", I think it is very difficult to answer, because I am a kind of person that shows different dispositions in different surroundings. And here I mainly talk about the performance I did at home and school, thus draws the conclusion how people see me according to the comments that my family and friends made.
First is at home. Because I am the third child in my family, so my parents always spoil me, and my sisters care for me; therefore, they think I am delicate. But only at home can I lead my life in the way I want to, because everything is so real. There is no hypocrisy, no hostility and no mockery, only sincere love for you to enjoy. Besides, my house is always full of laughter because of my jokes. So, they said that I am cute. However, there are also some reasonable but disappointing evaluation. Lazy, bad-tempered, extravagant, ungrateful and selfish are all the words that they used to describe me, how surprising! Am I bad to such a degree? .Although these comments are negative sides, but I still like it, for it is only the people who love you will make such favorable evaluation on you and point out your mistakes, letting you have the room for improvement. So what I need to do is just cherish their endless love and change what I should change as much as I can.
Next is at school. Not until one of my best friends told me that I am a gentlewoman in her eyes since she knew me did I realize that I showed completely different characters at home and school. Gradually I learn that I am a good student in most of my classmates' eyes, because I had performing excellently both in and out of class. They regard me as an enthusiastic, diligent, wise and lovely girl, some students even said I was their idol because of my outstanding performance in almost every aspect, especially in high school, I have been always is the first in my class, it is really quite a glorious memory. But the higher the students estimate you, the more pressure you will stand, once you did badly one time, then your friends will be disappointed.
I believe that there is a lot of people who also have such similar situation, maybe most of them will think that being versatile is great just as I thought before, but later I realize that too much praise will make you too proud of yourself, and then it is easy to lead to your complacency because it would give you a kind of illusion that you are the best in the world, consequently, you will lose many valuable things. What I want to stress is to live the way whichever you prefer and be yourself.

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