Educational Inequity and Distorted Humanity1048219黄堃

Educational inequity, which we have advocated for long, has never been truly achieved. We pay sympathy to those shepherd boys who are worried about their schooling cost. We indignantly criticize the rich and the officers who make use of their privileges to make inequity. We also spur our government to take measures to guarantee educational equality. But at last we have to accept that everything is still unchanged, because we have tried everything but autocriticism.
Inequity is, in my view, deeply rooted in our tradition, our culture and our daily life. China has a history of inequity. In ancient China, the aristocrat enjoyed unparalleled priority to other classes. The noble boys could receive the best education in all expertise. This kind of tradition is, unfortunately, inherited up to now and become a main string of culture. People in the same nation, meanwhile, are ridiculously contradicted: they condemn firmly those unequal phenomenons while they are also eager to enjoy more privileges than anyone else. This type of distorted humanity is displayed entirely in our daily life. Since our childhood, we have depicted such images of people in our articles and speeches for many times who are relatively “minor” to us such as uneducated children, disabled persons and cleaners. Of course we always speak highly of their spirits and give a positive estimate. But who entitles us to judge, to evaluate and to estimate? Actually we have just put us in a higher position and are showing off our superiority. We are satisfied with the feeling that we are well-educated to show our “respect” to those who are “weaker” than us.
I think the God himself could never believe that the creature he made, in the same nation, of the same complexion, speaking the same language, drinking the same water, can be treated so differently. The inequity of education, n fact the inequity of humanity, should be cured by humanity itself. And the first step, as I have mentioned, is self-introspection. And that is the sole remedy to the distorted word.

1. pay...sympathy无此用法 have sympathy for sb 同情某人
have sympathy with 支持某事
2.建议将phenomenons改为phenomena
3.positive estimate无此用法
4.I think the God himself could never believe that the creature he made, in the same nation, of the same complexion, speaking the same language, drinking the same water, can be treated so differently.
此句型用的太过频繁，建议改为sb. suppose +从句或sb. claim +从句或sb. agree +从句或第一人称时替换为As far as I am concerned.