Education inequality in China

As the famous French thinker Rousseau said, education is a great tool to achieve social equity. China's Education Law stipulates that citizens enjoy equal opportunity to receive education. They should not be restricted of the state of property. According to the survey, China's education is not fair in at least the following three aspects.
First, the gap between urban areas and rural areas caused the inequality. Currently, the gap between urban areas and rural areas is widening obviously and it causes the imbalance in allocation of educational resources and results in unfair education. "Seeking" magazine reported farmers’ per capita income in 2009. Pudong and Kunshan was 12000 yuan and Dingxi was 1800 yuan. We can see that there is a great deal of difference among famers in different cities. And when the compulsory education is on the basis of the economic condition, because of the counties facing financial difficulty, it inevitably will lead to the difficulty in education. Some schools, because the local government has sufficient funds, they have spacious and elegant environments, first-class facilities, all kinds of advanced equipment, language room, computer room, laboratory, piano room, art gallery, library, and gymnasium. But some other schools which do not have enough education funds still use dilapidated housings and their teaching method is still a blackboard, a piece of chalk and a teacher's mouth. It causes children in the countries lose in the starting line.
Second, the system design causes the education inequality. For example, college entrance examination system has some problems. In the allocation of quota, the government does not consider the population and number of students in different counties and cities. The entrance designs of some local high school or universities cause difficulties in other areas. For example, Henan province has nearly 100 million people and the number of students graduated from senior middle school every year is about 960 thousand. Among these students, only 6000 can go outside of the province to study, for example, in Beijing University, Qinghua University. In addition, the enrollment quota of these high schools is 8.3 ‰ in all of the cities in China but it is only 0.1 ‰ in Henan. There are not enough good high schools in their province and high schools in other provinces do not need them, so they have to walk on the wire or spend a lot of money to the big city to read those state-run educational institutions.
Third, low family income causes the education inequality. The stage of compulsory education is free according to the policy, so that everyone can be enrolled in compulsory education stage to achieve the basic education. However, due to the poverty of some families, their children still have difficulties in studying in the senior middle schools and high schools. Especially tuition fee of the key schools with high quality of teaching is always very high and children in low-income families can not receive high quality education.
We have done a lot of work and solved some problems in the education equity but there are still many problems. In order to construct a harmonious society, promoting social equity, we still need to make great efforts in the education equality. It not only needs to increase national finance investment to solve the financial difficulties of poor counties, but also needs to promote the standardization of running school in order to reduce the regional differences and the differences between urban and rural areas. I believe that under the lead of Chinese characteristic socialism and scientific outlook on development, education inequality will be solved at last.

评语：总的来说，本文语句流畅，条理也很清楚，词汇基础扎实；但是，从句数量偏少，且文中有几处句子错误；全文结构较为严谨，应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。下面是我个人的一点拙见。(*^__^*) 嘻嘻……

1.Currently, the gap between urban areas and rural areas is widening obviously and it causes the imbalance in allocation of educational resources and results in unfair education.中的 ”results in unfair education” 改为”results in education inequality”是不是更好些.

2.We can see that there is a great deal of difference among famers in different cities.中的’”famers” 拼写错误，应该是”farmers”

3.And when the compulsory education is on the basis of the economic condition, because of the counties facing financial difficulty, it inevitably will lead to the difficulty in education. 将这一句中的” it inevitably will lead to the difficulty in education”改为” it inevitably will lead to educational difficulties”个人觉得更好些.

4.Some schools, because the local government has sufficient funds, they have spacious and elegant environments, first-class facilities, all kinds of advanced equipment, language room, computer room, laboratory, piano room, art gallery, library, and gymnasium. 此句子中所罗列的这些名词应该用复数，即” all kinds of advanced equipments, language rooms, computer rooms, laboratories, piano rooms, art galleries, libraries, and gymnasiums”

5.It causes children in the countries lose in the starting line. 农村孩子用“rural children”更简单； 输在起跑线上应当用介词“at”而不是“in”

6.The entrance designs of some local high school or universities cause difficulties in other areas. 你想表达的是：“一些当地的高中或者大学的入学限制......”我觉得”the entrance designs of ….”用”the limits of recruitment and enrollment of…” 会更好一点儿。

7.the number of students graduated from senior middle school every year is about 960 thousand.此句有点儿像中式英语，我个人觉得可以把”every year”放在句尾。

8.Among these students, only 6000 can go outside of the province to study, for example, in Beijing University, Qinghua University. 我觉得不够规范，个人认为可以改为”only 6000 students can further their study in those famous universities, for example, in Beijing University, Qinghua University”.

9.There are not enough good high schools in their province and high schools in other provinces do not need them, so they have to walk on the wire or spend a lot of money to the big city to read those state-run educational institutions. 此句在表达上条理不够清楚，个人觉得改为“their own province don’t have enough good high schools, on the other hand, those good high schools of other provinces don’t want to accept them. In such circumstance, a large number of students have to walk on the wire or spend a lot of money on those state-run educational institutions which are in the big cities.”会更好一点儿。
10.However, due to the poverty of some families, their children still have difficulties in studying in the senior middle schools and high schools. 在结构have difficulty(in) doing中，difficulty为不可数名词。所以，本人建议将“difficulties”改为“difficulty”。且，初中是“ the junior middle school”高中是“ the senior high school”。

11.In order to construct a harmonious society, promoting social equity, we still need to make great efforts in the education equality. 将此句中的“in the education equality”的冠词the去掉。

12.It not only needs to increase national finance investment to solve the financial difficulties of poor counties, but also needs to promote the standardization of running school in order to reduce the regional differences and the differences between urban and rural areas. 这句话在这一段当中，我觉得作为例子来处理会更加好一点。你觉得改为“for example, to solve the financial difficulties of poor counties, the government shall increase finance investment; and to reduce the regional differences and the differences between urban and rural areas, the government and schools should improve the standardization of running school”是不是会更好一点儿？
上述是个人的一点建议，请参考哈！