1048501 车蕊 第三次作业 education

Parent’s income does count in children education
As the social develop, children education has become a hot topic in parents’ daily life. There are lots of factors which is influence the child’s education environment. In my opinion, parents’ income could be a crucial factor in children education.
Firstly, some parents cannot afford the tuition to the children to have a higher education. The university tuition is more and more expensive. Children who come from the lower income family would lose this opportunity to attend a better university. Most of them only study in Community University or drop out to make a living. On the other side, according to survey, in recent years, the children in the poverty-stricken areas also have poor nutritional problem. Participate in the medical examination of 1458 from 10 to 13 years old students, growth retardation nearly 12%, and low weight rate reached 9%. Obviously, a child who has not a healthy body and always empty stomach how he can concentrate on study.
Secondly, lower income family doesn’t have a good study environment. We know study environment is an essential element which influences the children’s grade. The children who come from a lower income family would easily to have the inferiority mentality, which will influence their development. Investigation show that parents’ income increased by 10%, which will lead to their children's income increased by 4.5%, which is meaning parents’ income to children education is long term. Although most of the children who growth in a lower income families are more responsibility and maturity, most of them is different to accept failure. It is hard for them to restore confidence when they suffer from failure. Because the pressure from their parents and economic.
Thirdly, parents’ income will influence children education economic input proportion, which would indirectly reflect parents’ education concept. According to the investigation that per capita income in 1500yuan of the following family is occupied 37%, and data show that 38% of families in 3000~6000yuan. Different family income determines children education economic input proportion, which will lead to the difference of children’s education result.
Fourthly, most of the lower income parents do not have a higher education background, so most of them cannot give a hand in children education. And they are always only care about children grade instead of comprehensive ability and ideological morality. If a student who his mental and personality is not sound, how can he undertake the responsibility of his family or others. Nowadays, if a graduate hasn’t comprehensive ability, it is difficult to find a better job. Investigation showed that learning habits and learning method are not the main factors, the interest, attitude and learning efficiency are the most important factors. If parents do not attach importance to the cultivation of children's non-intelligence factors, it will hard for them to adjust the society. Someone does not know how to cooperate with the person, low legal consciousness. Such "talent" will eventually eliminate by the society.
To some extend, parent’s income does count in children education.

1.Topic sentence: Parent’s income does count in children education
1st Supporting idea :Firstly, some parents cannot afford the tuition to the children to have a higher education.
　　2nd supporting idea: Secondly, lower income family doesn’t have a good study environment.
　　3rd supporting idea:Thirdly, parents’ income will influence children education economic input proportion, which would indirectly reflect parents’ education concept.
　　4th supporting idea:Fourthly, most of the lower income parents do not have a higher education background, so most of them cannot
Concluding sentence:To some extend, parent’s income does count in children education.

2.Advantages　　
(1)When you try to prove your arguments, you tend to use examples and numbers, which is very clear and convincing.
　　(2)You deeply dig into your topic sentence, and figure out four supporting ideas.

3.Disadvantages　　
(1)In your second supporting idea, you say it is about "a good study environment". But after reading this paragraph, i find that actually you are mainly talking about students' mental condition.
　　(2)Your third supporting idea is good but you don't state it in detail. You simply list some numbers but don't analyze them. Besides, I think the third supporting idea is slightly similar with the first supporting idea, don't you think so?
　　(3)Your make some grammar mistakes and I do not list all of them here.
　　For example, the first paragraph, "As the social develop(society develops), children education (just "education" is enough) has become a hot topic in parents’ daily life. There are lots of factors which is influence the child’s education environment (influence education). In my opinion, parents’ income could be a crucial factor in children education (children's education)."
I think we can talk about this issue afterwards or you can use some tools to check them.

Parent’s income does count in children education
As the society develops, education has become a hot topic in parents’ daily life. There are lots of factors which is influence education. In my opinion, parents’ income could be a crucial factor in children’s education.
Firstly, some parents cannot afford the tuition to the children to have a higher education. The university tuition is more and more expensive. Children who come from the lower income family would lose this opportunity to attend a better university. Most of them only study in Community University or drop out to make a living. On the other side, according to survey, in recent years, the children in the poverty-stricken areas also have poor nutritional problem. Participate in the medical examination of 1458 from 10 to 13 years old students, growth retardation nearly 12%, and low weight rate reached 9%. Obviously, a child who has not a healthy body and always empty stomach how he can concentrate on study.
Secondly, lower income family doesn’t have a good study environment. We know study environment is an essential element which influences the children’s grade and mental condition. The children who come from a lower income family would easily to have the inferiority mentality, which will influence their development. Investigation show that parents’ income increased by 10%, which will lead to their children's income increased by 4.5%, which is meaning parents’ income to children’s education is long term. Although most of the children who growth in a lower income families are more responsibility and maturity, most of them is different to accept failure. It is hard for them to restore confidence when they suffer from failure. Because the pressure from their parents and economic.
Thirdly, parents’ income will influence children’s education economic input proportion, which would indirectly reflect parents’ education concept. According to the investigation that per capita income in 1500yuan of the following family is occupied 37%, and data show that 38% of families in 3000~6000yuan. Different family income determines children’s education economic input proportion, which will lead to the difference of children’s education result. Such as the children who live in a wealth family in a city, he will have more opportunities to touch better advantage technology, elegant culture and educational atmosphere. So the comprehensive quality of children is related with parents’ income.
Fourthly, most of the lower income parents do not have a higher education background, so most of them cannot give a hand in children’s education. And they are always only care about children ‘s grade instead of comprehensive ability and ideological morality. If a student who his mental and personality are not sound, how can he undertake the responsibility of his family and others. Nowadays, if a graduate hasn’t comprehensive ability, it is difficult to find a better job. Investigation showed that learning habits and learning method are not the main factors, the interest, attitude and learning efficiency are the most important factors. If parents do not attach importance to the cultivation of children's non-intelligence factors, it will hard for them to adjust the society. Someone does not know how to cooperate with the person, low legal consciousness. Such "talent" will eventually eliminate by the society.
To some extend, parent’s income does count in children education.