1048307 章含芳 第一次作业

Me in the eyes of other people

William Shakespeare once said, "All the world's a stage, and all the men and women merely players." And I comprehend that everyone plays different roles in different scenes.
“What kind of person I am?” this question often occurs to me. Someone told me that I was kind-hearted and positive; someone judged me as a girl of an uncommunicative and eccentric disposition. I cannot define exactly my personality in that I have seen totally different me in the eyes of other people.
In the eyes of teachers, I am a hardworking student. I will carefully and promptly accomplish the exercises allotted; I will listen with attention to them in class; I will review my lessons in the classroom. However, they don’t know that I often complain about doing so much homework and many times in class I just sit there staring blankly. I will stay all night long before a computer; I only read textbooks carefully before an examination. Stripped me of biddable appearance, there is a heart thirsting for freedom and rebellious self.
In the eyes of parents, I am an everlasting-little child. I will ask father some childish questions; I will sleep with mother when the thunder rolls. But they don’t know that I have grown up, and I can face difficulties on my own, furthermore, I have learnt to understand them. I know that parents will feel the sense of loss when they find I have been independent enough. Therefore, I hide the mature aspect of me, hoping that I will always be their simple and pure child in the eyes of them.
In the eyes of friends, I am easy to get along with. I will listen to them attentively, and give them a smile at an opportune moment; I will join them, gossiping some topics I am interested in. I treat everyone sincerely, but it doesn’t mean that I will share everything with my friends. In the depth of my heart, there is a quiet area where conceals my secrets which I have never told my friends. Friends are complementary but not coincident. Therefore, they don’t see the one of me in my deep heart.
Teachers, parents and friends, I have seen many different me through their eyes. They are all real, but none is complete. I haven’t changed anything, just showing them as different modes.




1048307 章含芳

文章结构清晰，能熟练使用长难句，长短句搭配合理，用词相当丰富，但连接词和过渡词稍欠缺，内容基本连贯，但文章行文稍欠流畅；比较大的问题在于以“I”为主语的句子过多，导致语言显得有些无力，小问题在于一些表达方式的运用和词的使用上，如many times in class I just sit there staring blankly (My mind was always wandering and preoccupied on other crap?), gossiping some topics I am interested in (gossip本身就有八卦的意思，后面就不能再和topics搭配了，要么我们可以把gossip用作名词，或者我们可以说gossip about something)。